Voodoo Child

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Carrot Ranch has selected the winner of the Rodeo Flashfiction challenge #6. This prompt was a doozy!

Challenge #6: First we had to sign up to receive a real US Rodeo bull’s name from the snickering, evil competition designers…. I received “Voodoo Child” (oh, great).

Then:

  1. Stories are to be 107 words long in 8 sentences.
  2. Stories are to include the two words drawn as your prompt (you may change the order of the words and they do not need to be adjacent).
  3. Write a fictional story that involves facing a challenge or fear.

Voodoo Child

Cici done hate hospitals, but Miss Clara drug her there on account of her drowned daughter, wee girl fixing to die.

“Can you help her?” Miss Clara say, crying and wringing her fingers like washday linens. “Do your… voodoo?”

Cici take no offense, for Miss Clara’s hurt so raw and deep it reach between them like they share a heart. Mothers do when they lose a child. Cici know it a grief to swallow the world.

Cradling the child’s doll, Cici chant some mumbo-jumbo over it like she made of magic. She coo, longing to believe, and pass it to Miss Clara like it a newborn soul.

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To read Kerry E.B. Black’s winning submission and other judge favorites, click here: Carrot Ranch

101 thoughts on “Voodoo Child

  1. Well done, Diana. Those rules are difficult. That was a very different type of story, very sad. I’ve read voodoo originated in Africa. Good writing. —- Suzanne

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    • Apparently there are several types or voodoo, Suzanne. I did a little research for the story and didn’t feel that I had enough knowledge to do anything justice, so I switched to the human story. I’m glad you liked my little attempt. 🙂

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  2. Teri Polen says:

    Brilliant, Diana – I have no idea what I’d even have done with that prompt.

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  3. An interesting piece, Diana. Mothers will resort to anything in a crisis.

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  4. You’ve done wonderfully, Diana! Proof that we grow with our challenges (Voodoo Child 😉).

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  5. Khaya Ronkainen says:

    Wow, such creativity! Your muse is working overtime. 🙂
    Amazing write!

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  6. You are not human! Wow. Consider my mind blown…as always! I love reading your stories so much, and thoroughly enjoyed this one. Well done, Diana! 😘

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  7. Outstanding, Diana! This does seem like a very difficult prompt to do. I love the metaphors and the emotion is quite powerful. I was firmly planted in Louisiana backcountry for a few moments. I enjoyed it so much! xo

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  8. Joanne Sisco says:

    This story is heart-breaking! My breath caught at the line “a grief to swallow the world” … a grief no mother ever wants to experience.
    Beautifully done is such a different way.

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  9. Tina Frisco says:

    You met the challenge brilliantly, Diana. It grabs the heart and would make an excellent prologue ❤

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  10. hsampson says:

    Brilliant D!!! Loved it, and you did the magic once more!!! Thank you!

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  11. inesephoto says:

    That was some challenge, Diana, but you did an excellent job and even avoided the voodoo 🙂 Short, true, and heartbreaking. The other entries are great too.

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  12. you are an amazing and creative writer, Diana.

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  13. As usual, you put me right there, in desperate need of doctoring, with no options but voodoo. I’d be there/

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  14. A different voice here, well crafted as always. Bravo!

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  15. balroop2013 says:

    Well done Diana! Your versatility is amazing! Too many rules about writing scare me. 🙂

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  16. Wow! Another great bit, Diana! And the character voice is so well defined in so few words. Well done!

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  17. Jennie says:

    You did well, Diana. Really good!

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  18. Job well done on this crazy challenge! I could really “hear” the voice of Cici in this. Excellent work. And Merry Christmas!

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  19. Wow! Those were crazy rules, Diana. I’m surprised they didn’t make you write with your non-dominant hand as an extra bonus. Amazing work doing so much with so few words. You had me under your spell. Did you use voodoo?

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  20. Steven Baird says:

    Wonderful job, Diana… a tough challenge well met.

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  21. Oh my 🙂 so different Diana. I felt some sadness. You did well !!! Have a great week 🙂

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  22. dgkaye says:

    Wow Diana, them there’s a lotta rules LOL. You dun good my friend! ❤

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  23. Erik says:

    Aside from the difficulty inherent in the assigned strictures, it’s an increasing challenge in our current world climate to branch into dialect and culture without causing offense. And yet I doubt any reader would find room for taking umbrage here, given the overwhelming tone of commonality — bonds forged in both despair and hope.

    (Wow, that was waxing eloquent; but it’s how it came out!)

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  24. Ah, a new side of your muse peeked out, I see. 🙂 You came through with flying colors. Great job, Diana.

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  25. Another fantastic submission, Diana! You captured the character’s voice and personality perfectly in so few words 🙂

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  26. You got the cadence and the sadness combined to a perfect answer to quite a challenge!

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  27. Mae Clair says:

    I would have been flummoxed with that one, Diana, but you nailed it! The voice of is so strong.

    I love “wringing her fingers like washday linens” and “pass it to Miss Clara like it a newborn soul.” You would have taken top honors in my vote!

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  28. How wonderful, poignant,and I love the voice, Diana. Thank you for sharing. 🙂

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  29. This was such a tricky prompt, and I love where you went with it, Diana! 🙂

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  30. Wow! You did a great job, Diana!

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  31. tmezpoetry says:

    This is proof that it takes so few words to reach the heart’s chamber

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  32. This is wonderful Diane, the vernacular so perfect, I love 💕 this.

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  33. Ooo, the winning one is really good too. I was pulled right in to thinking I’d outsmarted the posse and won my freedom and bam…not so much. And the good/evil balance is restored. Amazing to do that in something so short.

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  34. So vivid, Diana. Hugs on the wing.

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  35. trentpmcd says:

    Great spin on the words. You went towards Haiti and real voodoo while I would have gone Jimi Hendrix and his song by the title.

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  36. Wow, that had a lot of parameters. I like what you did with it. A tough one for sure, and your story brought a lot of heart in so few words.

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  37. Val Boyko says:

    You captured so much is so few words. I feel it deeply. Not sure what “it” is exactly, but it hit home Diana. 💛

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