Galatea

Étienne Maurice Falconet: Pygmalion et Galatée (1763)

The Carrot Ranch Flash Fiction Rodeo announced another winner, and I’m thrilled to have pulled off top honors with this one. Yay!

Challenge #4: In a double length Carrot Ranch flash, or 2 chapters of 99-words each (198 words total), tell a story that shows a scar. It can be memoir, other forms of creative non-fiction,  any genre of fiction, or based on a true story.

Galatea

My father was Pygmalion and I his child chiseled by his scowls and smiles into the woman of his daydreams, a huntress, a poet, a woman who walked barefoot over mountains. In the light of his approving eye, I flourished in the myth of Galatea, a living statue until age cracked my smooth skin. What he thought was carved of marble I revealed as plaster, the child beneath growing beyond the sculptor’s control. I was a betrayal of his art, his vision, a flesh and bone girl with her own daydreams, and he said, “I don’t love you anymore.”

And so, the sculptor became a butcher, his chisel traded for a cleaver, Galatea gone, my myth smashed into rubble on the floor. In pieces, I sought new masters to glue together my shattered heart, unable to accept I was clay, not stone, and the only artist was me. For decades, I fashioned a new myth, molded her with tender fingers and scraped away layers of pain, all the while longing for my maker to undo the original wound. But time cannot be undone or cuts unmade. I forgave and finally became a woman wholly of flesh and bone.

 

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Many thanks to Carrot Ranch and to the judges, and congratulations to all those who entered. To read the powerful work of other top contenders, click here: Carrot Ranch

155 thoughts on “Galatea

  1. inesephoto says:

    Congratulations, Diana! It is a breathtaking piece.

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  2. devereaux frazier says:

    Reblogged this on Creative Writing Reblogged.

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  3. Congratulations on the award, Diana! What a beauti ful and moving story you’ve retold in your very own way. I love the classic myths and the one about Pygmalion and Galatea always makes me sigh…

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  4. Many congratulations, Diana. I can see why this piece of writing won you the competition. It was such a ‘deep’ read.

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  5. Congratulations, Diana! Amazing piece, could not have found a better winner 🙂

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  6. Congratulations, Diana! Well-deserved win. 🎉

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  7. Amazing story D! beautiful!

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  8. mycountryepoque says:

    CONGRATULATIONS Diana! You stand out and you shine in the billions of authors we have around the world. Your story short, and well told deserved to be won. I am so happy and I enjoyed the story, it is very exciting and “would you turn it into a book?” Just wonder what is in your mind about this little story that won the prize!

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    • Thanks for the lovely comment, Juli. This little flash piece isn’t going to become a book, though sometimes that does happen. It will stay as it is. I’m so glad you like it, though. Have a wonderful Sunday, my friend. 🙂

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  9. What a powerful little story, Diana! Well done!

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  10. Well, geeze, no wonder you won. That was masterful.

    And in the spirit of rodeos everywhere, allow me to give you a sincere “YEE-HAA!”

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  11. iArtichokeu says:

    Well deserved! Congrats Diana!!

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  12. Beautiful. you deserve to always win, Diana, you have such control with words, you shape and mold them so perfectly.

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  13. Jennie says:

    Wonderful, Diana! Congratulations.

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  14. Hi! I commented yesterday but all my comments to everyone went into Spam folders. Yikes. Hopefully this works now. I found this ‘2-part- story full of layers: sad, and yet hopeful in the end. She’s a woman now!

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  15. Diana, this story is fabulous. It works on so many levels and reveals much about human beliefs and relationships. Congratulations!

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