13 STEPS TO EVIL Writing Competition Winners

Yesterday, Sacha Black announced the winner of her
13 STEPS TO EVIL Writing Competition.

The assignment was to write a short piece (exactly 208 words) with a “seriously kick-ass villain.” Fortunately, I’d just read Sacha’s book: 13 Steps to Evil, which is full of awesome tips about creating dastardly bad guys.  Now, I swear I’m a nice person, but this challenge was irresistible, and I’m honored that my story placed first in evilness. Congratulations to Charise de Becker and Judy E. Martin for their winning submissions. Pop over to read their evil writing at 13 Steps to Evil #Writespiration Writing Competition Winners.

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Barus

The woman studied him in silence. Barus sensed her eyes on his face, begging for a glance, on his hands as he cleaned the delicate needles and polished his blades. He possessed exquisite hands, long-fingered, soft and nimble. Hands for caressing the cheeks of children and lovers.

His preparations complete, he faced his charge. “Are you comfortable?”

Her brow furrowed, and he sighed, for how could she answer such a question? “An unfair inquiry. My apologies. Are you in pain? Thirsty?”

She shook her head, the gag preventing all but a muffled reply.

“You must understand the empire’s need for a flaying, a warning to all who flirt with rebellion. Your ordeal will save hundreds, perhaps thousands of lives.” He took a stool beside her chair, brushed a bright tear from her eye, and stroked her iron-bound arm. “I shall be quick.”

Her fingers curled into a fist. He withdrew his touch, the time for compassion ended. The life of his young son depended on unbearable pain, and he, the emperor’s latest executioner, would comply.

He unbound her gag, and she spat in his face, cursed his spirit to the shadowlands. He smiled at her prophetic appeal. Needles first, then knives. The entire city would hear her scream.

109 thoughts on “13 STEPS TO EVIL Writing Competition Winners

  1. Many congratulations on your win, Diana. That was 208 scary words that had my teeth on edge. I’m sure I heard the sound of sharpening knives while reading it. 😱

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  2. Bel says:

    No way would I want to be captured by Barus!! Scary!

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  3. Who knew you were a horror writer, too, Diana! Congratulations!

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    • Ha ha. I’m not! The only future for a story like this would be that Barus (early in the book) defies his masters and then spends the rest of the book trying to overcome his past and baser nature. It would be an interesting story to write, but I couldn’t write horror. Too scary!

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  4. inesephoto says:

    Congratulations, Diana! As always, you gave your readers much more than the 208 words can hold 🙂

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  5. Sacha Black says:

    Congratulations once again Diana, so well deserved ❤

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  6. Congratulations, Diana! Very creepy, reminiscent of serial killer characters I’ve been reading, but even better because of the redeeming quality of wanting to protect his son. Excellent (if evil 😉 )

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  7. Oh my goodness, Diana. This was so morbidly fascinating. The image sticking with me are his hands, the ones that caress children and lovers are the same working with knives and needles. That name is so perfect too, even sounds like the perfect villain. Congratulations!

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    • Thanks, Lana. I’m glad you noticed the hands. Beautiful hands, both instruments of pain and pleasure. The name just popped into my head as if it had been there all along. Funny how that happens. Have a wonderful week, my friend. 🙂

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  8. Congratulations Diana.. and thanks for the last images I will take away with me before bed tonight…….xx

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  9. My heart is beating much too fast after reading this award-winning piece, so many emotions and passion, both characters prisoners in those exquisite and excruciating moments…

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    • What a wonderful comment. I’m glad you recognized that Barus’s choices too are limited, but then he does have that smile….
      This was “fun” layering his character. Thanks for stopping by and have a great week!

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  10. I’m going to have nightmares tonight – thanks to you. You are evil!! :-0 (But the writing is incredible – I can see why you won first place.)

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  11. Haha First in Evilness I love it. Congratulations Diana 🙂 My goodness ! Creepy …..and dark….awful and just so cruel…. Really really good though, just another side to your talents. Have a good weekend. 🙂

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  12. I commented over at Sacha’s but it’s not showing up. I said something along the lines of how much I loved this piece. Well-deserved win for a villain. He’s… Barus. 😈 It’s brilliant.

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  13. Dawn D says:

    He is evil, but I could almost forgive him, if the life of his son hangs in the balance. The truly evil one to me is the Emperor who is manipulating him.
    Though, I wonder, if the whole city can hear her screams… how will his son feel, knowing his life was saved only because his father turned evil and tortured another person? Her cries will forever resonate in his mind, and will probably be a shell of a human.
    This said, maybe this is what happened to his father, maybe he heard his own father torture someone in order to save his life and that messed with his brain so much that he grew up to become this?

    Interesting, tought-provoking, nerve-racking story Diana!

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  14. Jennie says:

    Congratulations, Diana. Creepy, and good.

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  15. Congratulations, Diana. You are a woman of many talents. This truly is evil. I couldn’t even have come up with it!

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    • It was sort of a character-building exercise, Jacqui – using the tips and trying to create a character with depth and various motivations. Normally, I’m not quite this gruesome! Thanks for stopping by to read. 😀

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  16. Reblogged this on Musings on Life & Experience and commented:
    Congratulations to Diana!

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  17. This character is indeed evil, Diana. This is the kind of reading I wouldn’t do just before bedtime. I can understand how you won the competition. Good writing. 🙂 — Suzanne

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  18. Annika Perry says:

    Yikes!! My throats is clamped shut from the evil emanating from your piece. Congratulations, Diana…frighteningly evil.

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  19. Sue Vincent says:

    Nasty… but so many undercurrents…

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  20. Wow, a compelling scene. Well-deserved, Diana, congrats! 🙂

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  21. dgkaye says:

    You’re on fire girl! Scary, good stuff! Congrats on winning Sacha’s contest! ❤

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  22. Scary. Chills! As soon as I read evil and “Seriously Kick-ass Villain” I knew something was coming. Congratulations on the win, Diana.

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  23. stevetanham says:

    Congratulations, Diana. Chilling villain!

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  24. balroop2013 says:

    Congrats Diana…I know you are so good at ‘kick ass villains’ 🙂

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  25. babbitman says:

    You do have a knack for writing baddies. Perhaps that’s one of the key elements of your stories – having a really nasty villain. Algar, Mikel, Phelan, Merrick and the rest. All individuals with different traits but all reet nasty pieces of work that deserve sticky ends. 😉

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  26. Gulp! I think you set the evil mood very well.

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  27. Ali Isaac says:

    Ugh! My God, Diana, how could someone so lovely write such a horrific character? I enjoyed him immensely. 😂 Congratulations!

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  28. Will I be able to sleep tonight?

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  29. Bone-chilling brilliance. Well done, D. and….gasp !

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  30. Frank says:

    Does the executioner take pride in his work, or does he act on sufferance?

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  31. Sheron says:

    Very powerful. It’ll keep me up tonight…gee, thanks for that.
    Well written, tight while giving a complete story.
    Bravo. Well deserved first place.

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  32. Oh my goodness, Diana. I could never, ever write something like this. It is excellent but I shudder at the thought.

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  33. A.P. says:

    Evil stuff you got there. The world has never known a bad guy before now.

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  34. Congratulations on coming in first.. I can see why… ewww

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  35. Vivian Zems says:

    Deliciously horrible! 😨

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  36. paulandruss says:

    Powerful!

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  37. philipparees says:

    For this there should be a ‘shudder’ button! ‘Like’ hardly cuts it! Congratulations.

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