Soul Swallower – new series WIP

I think that’s the name of the series. I like the alliteration anyway. Better than Soul Gulper.

Perhaps you remember the character Raze from one of Sue Vincent’s #writephoto prompts. Well, he’s back with a series of his own.

I don’t have too much to share yet, but here’s a brief peek at the act of swallowing a soul:

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When the others retired, Raze sat by the hearth, its flames dwindling to scarlet embers. His grief for Briyon unearthed old ghosts, his mother among them, an ageless portrait suspended in the gallery of his mind. Not so his memories of Mirelle. Those lingered with infinite fluidity, entangled with visions of the past and dreams of a future that would never be.

Six years had shuffled by since her death, five since he’d joined Briyon at the freehold, and no lever had proved long or strong enough to pry her from his heart. Loneliness invaded his body so deeply it punched the breath from his lungs and sapped the strength from his back, and no hoping and wishing could bring those people back. A twenty-one he was master of the freehold, a tired soul, angry at a world he couldn’t control.

He turned the pendant over in his hand, keenly aware of its delicate beauty. The white soulstone had transformed, no longer solid but translucent with pale wisps of color swirling like morning mist. Copper wire the breadth of a strand of hair coiled around it, holding a round sliver of peridot in place with a final twist of two tiny leaves. It glowed with a soft light, indicating the presence of a soul. A soul he loved.

With great care, he unhooked the copper leaves, unwound the wire, and removed the green gem that capped a small hole. Inside, an iridescent sphere resembling a pearl shone with a brilliance that startled him. Were all souls so bright? He didn’t know; this was his first. He rolled it into his hand. Would he swallow it? Did he want what Briyon offered? Was there anything to fear?

The pearl of light glowed in his palm, offering no insight. He placed it back into the pendant. No need to choose; no decision pressed him to act with haste. The round gem refitted, he coiled the wires, paused, and then uncoiled them. In one fluid motion, he uncapped the pendant, tipped the sphere into his mouth, and swallowed.

A rush of heat streamed from his belly, up through his heart into his head and down his limbs to his fingers and toes. His body trembled, the sensation alien, but not frightening, and not long lived, for it subsided as quickly as it had overtaken him. Eyes closed, he accepted Briyon’s soul. In the quiet of night, he exhaled a long breath, crept to bed, and dreamed another man’s dreams.

137 thoughts on “Soul Swallower – new series WIP

  1. Erik says:

    I think the title is brilliant, Diana. It’s evocative and I don’t know that I’ve ever heard of a book that covered something close (which is what drew me to your work in the first place — your ability to introduce truly new concepts to a genre that can be very samey).

    My imagination was opened with this excerpt. I wondered what would happen if someone soul swallowed based on who they thought that person to have been — even someone they considered very close to them — only to learn after the fact that “what lay beneath” was quite a different soul. The lover who had been unfaithful. The saintly mother who was secretly treacherous. The best friend who turns out to have been a serial killer. You swallow the soul for the best of reasons … only to unwittingly reap knowledge or personality traits or even powers you never knew were there.

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    • Yes, that is a problem, isn’t it? **Rubs hands together and snickers evilly.** As written now, swallowing a soul conveys some adeptness with skills, and an edge of personality and temperament – sort of like the formative influence a parent would have on a child. And there are numerous downsides, partly the hidden fears and predilections as you point out, but also the characteristics that worked in one life but are burdens in the next. And there are a whole bunch of complications when too many souls are swallowed.

      I should have the first drafts (a duology) completed by the end of November! That’s the goal, anyway. Thanks for taking the time to read, Erik. I value your thoughts and opinion immensely. Happy November!

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  2. I don’t know how I missed this important post. My goodness, but this line pulled on my heartstrings: “It glowed with a soft light, indicating the presence of a soul. A soul he loved.” This is going to be great, Diana.

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  3. reocochran says:

    This part of the story is fascinating, Diana. I really like how Raze had his heart broken and still feels the pain of losing his love, Mirelle.
    I think both names show portent, his seems dangerous and hers seems innocent and pretty.
    His decision making skills are hindered from heartbreak, losing his friend (brother?) and is choosing a treacherous path. I’m not sure what Briyon’s life soul will show Raze in his dreams. . . but this felt eerie and like he made a “rash choice.” Good luck with allowing the muse to take you into twisting thoughts! I could imagine possibly needing Raze to use heroic strength to “get back” from his swallowing souls journey.

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  4. Jennie says:

    This is very exciting!!

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  6. Oh, this sounds very intriguing and I love your potential series title, has a great ring to it!

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  7. Oh wow, this sounds fantastic, Diana! Now you’ve got me wondering where the story will go–there are so many possibilities with this. I’d better get moving on my TBR list 😀 Have a great weekend!

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  8. Bernadette says:

    Wow. Great premise and as always engaging storytelling.

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  9. Annika Perry says:

    Wow! A terrific introduction to your latest book, Diana – darkly powerful writing as always and I’m haunted by this idea…to then end up dreaming another person’s dreams. Yikes!

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    • Kind of creepy, isn’t it? Even if the person was a wonderful influence and the dreams are sweet ones. Of course that isn’t going to be case all the time in the book! Ha ha. No one gets off easy! Thanks for stopping by, Annika. Happy Writing. 🙂

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  10. Your writing is beautiful, Diana. This is a great start and I am now desperate to know what will happen in the morning.

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  11. A.S. Akkalon says:

    Beautifully written, as always, and intriguing. Thanks for sharing!

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  12. I love your phrase, “years had shuffled by”.

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    • Thank you! I’m so glad you enjoyed the little excerpt. I’m a long way from having a book ready for the public, but it’s fun to share a little glimpse. Have a wonderful creative day. 🙂

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      • You’re most welcome–wishing you best success on the book!

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      • lol – the first taste is always free! 🙂 Now that I’m a confirmed DWP addict, I suppose I have no choice but to muffle the jones awakened by this wonderful snippit by downloading an earlier book to my Kindle. Suggestions on where to begin?

        Beautiful imagery in the words above –
        “an ageless portrait suspended in the gallery of his mind”
        “no lever had proved long or strong enough to pry her from his heart”
        “years had shuffled by”
        and your careful choice of wordage like “crept” to bed.

        A truly wonderful “sneak peak.” I wish you godspeed finishing this lovely.
        xx,
        mgh
        (Madelyn Griffith-Haynie – ADDandSoMuchMORE dot com)
        ADD/EFD Coach Training Field founder; ADD Coaching co-founder
        “It takes a village to transform a world!”

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        • Oh goodness. I love/hate it when someone asks where to start. I get all anxious and giddy. Ha ha. My guess is that you might enjoy Sorcerer’s Garden, a stand-alone, so not a huge commitment. 😀 It’s a wild ride, too. Thanks so much for the lovely comment and the wonderful support.

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          • Sorry to add to your agita – but I do appreciate the suggestion.
            xx,
            mgh

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          • Well I have been on an Amazon adventure since you left this suggestion.

            After starting the book from the “look inside” preview on Amazon’s site, I paid for Sorcerer’s Garden, got the receipt online, and turned on my Kindle Fire. Huh? The only D. Wallace Peach book on my bookshelf was Catling’s Bane (Book 1).

            After a bit of time on my computer (where I reached a page telling me they had closed my Associate’s Account – that I had never opened to begin with), I found a phone number and listened through a bunch of voice prompts, none of which fit my situation.

            Making my best wrong guesses, I finally reached a lovely man with an accent who talked me through various things to try, Kindle-wise. When none of them worked, he asked me to turn it off, then back on (no dice), and finally “pushed” the book to me and assured me that “he would leave a note” and that my account (that I don’t have, remember) would remain open.

            ????? ::scratching head::

            Is it any wonder I can’t figure out how to work my dratted Kindle? Technology — grrrrrrr! See how addicted you’ve got me? 🙂 In any case, I am getting ready to turn in, Kindle in hand, to find out what’s happening with the job with the man in the [not] coma. G’nite!
            xx,
            mgh

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  13. This is so wonderful, as always so much vivid imagery! I can’t wait to read more Diana!

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  14. Yay — a new series! Diana, this is a tantalizing snippet. I love how you had him put away the soul, and then abruptly take it back out and swallow. Masterfully done. Hugs on the wing!

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  15. What a description. I don’t even know how I’d think that up. I’m eager to read more.

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  16. shaunkellett says:

    Sounding good so far, D!
    Intrigued to see what else comes from it.

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  17. This is lovely, Diana. I love the name Raze and I’m relieved he swallowed a soul and not sole since that would be too fishy for my tastes. It is obvious your muse for hire has been having you work overtime. This is an intriguing snippet from your story.

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  18. janmalique says:

    This looks like it’s going to evolve into an intriguing world. Thank you for sharing!

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  19. Wow, Diane! That is brilliant. I really love it. I look forward to seeing the story in its full form.

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  20. dgkaye says:

    Wow. It seems like not so long ago you weren’t writing a book. This looks to be another promising series for you Diana. Me thinks your muse is cracking the whip on you! Lol 🙂 x

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  21. Diana, this is so mystical and magnificent! What an intriguing concept, soul swallowing. I was also fascinated with the pendant (I make jewelry) so I was trying to imagine the details of it. You will do amazing things with this series!

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  22. inesephoto says:

    So wonderful. Look forward to reading your new book! xx

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  23. Another beautiful series Diane…lovely excerpt, I look forward to the entire story! 🙂

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  24. I do so love the way you write, but this concept might be a bit out of my comfort zone depending on how far you go with it……….. Just this little bit kind of creeped me out, it’s the same feeling when Dracula bares his teeth…….

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    • Yes, I know what you mean. I do, and it may not be for you. In this world, it’s normal, a way to stay connected to deceased loved ones and pass on aptitudes and skills. In the story there will be different opinions about soul swallowing, unbound souls and what happens to them. And of course there will be many opportunities for things to go very wrong.

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  25. Wonderful passage, Diana…

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  26. I like the title, though it sounds ominous. Will that reflect the mood of the book? This snippet seems somewhat gentle though with potential for trouble lurking. Very interesting concept, and in your hands a great story, no doubt. Enjoy the weaving!

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    • I tend to write on the ominous side, Sheri. Ha ha. Raze’s experience here and the impact on his life is what happens if everything goes right. But there are many different kinds of souls and a person can swallow more than one – many, in fact. I’m so glad you enjoyed the tease. Happy Writing. 🙂

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  27. Wow, excellent writing. Now, I am curious to know what the soul does to him once he swallows it.

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  28. iArtichokeu says:

    Awesome! I’m just starting to read your work, but knowing I’ll have even more to read gets me so excited!

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  29. Holy crap, I LOVE this. ❤ So, it's gettin' real up in here. Your muse is working out well. I'm thrilled to pieces about this.

    Hahaha! Could you please title this Soul Gulper? No, I jest. Sort of. How about a post entitled Soul Gulper?

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  30. Teri Polen says:

    Fell for this one hook, line, and sinker, Diana – looking forward to it!

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  31. Beautifully written as always. Another winner!

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  32. Wow Diana. The title, intro, and premise grabbed me by the gut. I’m kind of afraid to follow, but I love the title!

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  33. Almost Iowa says:

    You have me hooked too – but with my absurd sense of humor, the dog would have swallowed it. [sorry] 🙂

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  34. ~M says:

    I loved this snippet! Can’t wait for more!

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  35. balroop2013 says:

    Congratulations on the new beginning Diana…this extract is quite promising 🙂 Apart from the poetic title, your phrases like “the pearl of light…” are beautifully carved. Happy writing!

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  36. Diana, I just adore your eloquent, penetrating prose. So beautifully written, I had to read this twice. Magnificent! Thank you for sharing. 🙂

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  37. superwifeandmummy says:

    Ooooh, I’m hooked!!

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  38. It sounds interesting, Diana. 🙂 — Suzanne

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  39. babbitman says:

    Oh no, you’re dragging me in again! The hours I’m spending living through the tales you spin of your wonderful worlds.
    How’s a guy supposed to get anything done?
    😉

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