Flying Lessons- 55 Word Story

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“Jump!”

I stand on the quarry rim, the still water black, oiled peacock feathers in the filtered light.

“Do it!” they dare, giggling, impatient.

I hold my nose, knobby knees bent, gazing up into oak leaves, surely facing my death.

“Jump, chicken!”

Eyes squeezed shut, I shriek, I leap.

I open my wings and fly.

101 thoughts on “Flying Lessons- 55 Word Story

  1. Erik says:

    I love the simplicity and the “restriction” of having a word count. How did you come across the specific number 55?

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  2. Love shorts with a twist in the tale! I read this quite literally obviously 😀

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  3. What a rush! Great bit, Diana, and great introduction to summer! Reminds me of hot summer days at the local lakes.

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  4. Such a short piece of writing but somehow it says so much, really enjoyed this. 🙂

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  5. I love the last line. If only we could all do this! *sigh*

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  6. reocochran says:

    This is a very exciting challenge which sounded like a young person’s perspective, Diana. It is interesting to read how people see a photo and come up with diverse messages and stories. This one was a perfect match, I feel. 🙂

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    • I wanted a skinny little kid with knobby knees, but this one at at a least captured the rock wall. We used to swim in swimming holes when I was a kid. Lots of jumping off big rocks! Thanks for reading, Robin 🙂 Have a great week!

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  7. Ali Isaac says:

    Gorgeous, Diana! I am writing an academic essay at the moment… so dull! Reading this was like jumping into a rainbow in comparison! Just what I needed. 😊

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  8. inesephoto says:

    Kids challenge each other. At least they did, when I was young 🙂 Great piece, so much said in just a few words.

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  9. Well, I was hoping for the best but it turned out differently than I thought it would. Well done with just 55 words, Diana. 🙂 — Suzanne

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  10. Oh marvelous set-up — and in so few words. I felt the ground go out from under me. Well done Diana.
    I’m reminded of one of my favorite quotes. “The knack of flying is learning how to throw yourself at the ground and miss.” – Douglas Adams
    Mega hugs!

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  11. Aquileana says:

    Love it… So I guess, that to a certain extent, some chickens might fly, if being under pressure 😀
    Happy weekend… All the best to you!, Aquileana 💫

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  12. Sean P Carlin says:

    When I was growing up in the Bronx, kids used to challenge one another to jump like this from the lofty heights of Columbia Rock into the Harlem River!

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    • Holy Smokes! 110 feet! Yikes, Sean. I would have chickened out. That’s crazy. Our cliffs were super high – about 12 feet! 🙂 🙂 So, did you jump??

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      • Sean P Carlin says:

        Did I jump? I climbed up there all the time, but let’s just say being the aesthete that I am, I preferred to admire the lovely views of the Palisades! I’m pretty sure my dad jumped as a kid, though; he lived on the other side of Spuyten Duyvil Creek in Inwood (the northernmost tip of Manhattan), and had crazy stories about his adventures growing up in the area. Of course, back in those days (this would’ve been the ’30s and ’40s), the New York waterways were a hell of a lot cleaner than they’d become by the ’80s!

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  13. Great job. I can almost feel this!

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  14. Nurse Kelly says:

    Love this! There are definitely life lessons tucked into those words! Hope you have a great weekend. 🙂

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    • I’m feeling excited about summer, Kelly, and after sitting on my butt for 8 months, the urge to get outside for an adventure is almost overwhelming. Soon! Have a great weekend, my friend 🙂

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      • Nurse Kelly says:

        Well I hope it’s an adventure you’ll never forget! I don’t like to hear about all that sitting either… you know better!
        But more about your writing… the versatility you share inspires me so much and I think it reflects your true nature as well – at least that’s what I take away from it. And this piece is playful yet wise as well… just like you!
        Hope you have fun – lots of fun very soon, up on your two feet! xo

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  15. balroop2013 says:

    Who can doubt your imagination!! Perfect! 🙂

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    • Thank you, Balroop. I love the way kids test the world and their own power. I’m feeling the urge to be a little adventurous and try out my own wings a little this summer 🙂 Have a wonderful weekend, my friend ❤

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  16. Frank says:

    I have a tendency to take things literally, so that last line was a startling twist the first time I read it. A moment of fantastical transformation above oily, black water strewn with peacock feathers.

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  17. With temperatures reaching three digits this is the perfect flash fiction. As always right on.

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    • If only the water wasn’t so brrrrr cold, Christina. It didn’t bother me as a kid, but now even 75 degrees is icy! Ha ha. Thanks so much for the visit and comment. Have a great weekend and stay cool! 🙂

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  18. Give me a parachute and I’ll jump! LOL! 😉

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  19. Heartafire says:

    Beautiful and perfect!

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  20. tric says:

    Speaks of childhood days perfectly, egged on but you wouldn’t dream of backing out. Then the exhilaration followed by complete denial you ever hesitated.

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  21. I love this! The last line is priceless. Well done! Sweet summer is surely on the way!

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  22. Ocean Bream says:

    Vibrant and free! Love the life depicted in this, Diana.

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  23. “I open my wings and fly,” I love the last sentence. It is so me.

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  24. babbitman says:

    “There is a knack to flying, which is basically to throw yourself at the ground and miss.”
    (I may not have got the quote perfect, but it’s what leaped into my mind when I read this!)

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  25. Annika Perry says:

    Such simple joy and adventures of the young I imagine when flying was so was so easy! Feelings of summer and mischief.

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    • You hit it, Annika. Summer is calling. I have a feeling I’m going to end up taking a bloggin break at some point to do some jumping 🙂

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      • Annika Perry says:

        Diana, you of us all should treat yourself to a blogging break over the summer! 😀 You work tirelessly and faithfully day in/day out! I’m as usual in Sweden for a few weeks this summer so enforced blogging break as no wifi…then a couple of weeks in Florida! I love the photo and we used to jump from the rocks into the sea in Sweden – loving that the scared happy moment before hitting the ice cold water.

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  26. PS I’m not very good at maths so that could in fact be wrong.

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  27. I thought that was exactly ten percent better than a fifty word story ;p

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  28. Oh, how I love this.

    How about a book of 55-word stories?

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  29. Oh, to feel the rush of the wind! Lovely!!

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  30. Love it. I have visions of the ending of the movie “Birdman”. ☺

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