The Quest – 55 Word Story

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compliation of images from pixabay

Slayer’s sword splits the night, lightning sharp, severing the troll’s head. Other monsters flee the blaze, bloodied, dying, howling in terror.

Silk hair swirling, blade singing, Slayer spins. He strikes, lean, beautiful, emerald eyes flashing, screaming, “I shall know my secret, beast!”

Trolls cower, break before him. “Alas, revealed,” one wails. “You are the monster.”

103 thoughts on “The Quest – 55 Word Story

  1. joannesisco says:

    Such a terrible secret indeed and rather eerily prescient given the events of last weekend and the exposure of another monster.

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    • Yes, the righteous beauty who is in fact the beast and doesn’t see the vileness of his acts upon the innocent. It seems to be a theme of our times (perhaps of humankind). Thanks for visiting, Joanne. Have a wonderful Sunday 🙂

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  2. Erik says:

    I admit, I didn’t read all of the comments on this one; so if you’ve already answered what I’m about to ask, please indulge me: What prompted the exact number 55 here?

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  3. It’s amazing how much you got into 55 words. Well written, Diana. I don’t know how I missed this one. I’m glad I found it. 🙂 — Suzanne

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  4. This is great short but gripping. Nice one.

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  5. stephie5741 says:

    Very powerful. Great job!!!

    Stephanie
    http://stephie5741.blogspot.com

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  6. Ali Isaac says:

    Oh! Very clever! Wasn’t expecting that, but so true.

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  7. Annika Perry says:

    Diana, this is too scary for me! Already hiding behind my pillow! 😀😀

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  8. Well done! Always amazed when writers can share so much of the story in so few words. 🙂

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  9. Elisabet says:

    Loved it! Shared it on my Facebook from your page.

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  10. Nitin says:

    as always i enjoyed the richness… and the revelation at the end was a treat.. 🙂

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  11. Reblogged this on Art by Rob Goldstein and commented:
    I loved this and had to share it.

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  12. Bravo. What a short yet powerful write.

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  13. Wow your writing is so vivid and full of images that pop out! I admire your writing so much!

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  14. This was incredible.

    But there was a small, impish part of me that wanted the troll to say “Dude. Slayer, take a chill pill.”

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  15. Nice post , I follow you , if you want me you can watch and

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  16. tedgiffin says:

    The 55 words chosen in the piece, prove to me, that you are a Master at your craft!

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    • Oh, thank you! As a lyricist, I’m sure you know well how hard it is at times to find the right words and make them fit! Thanks for the visit, Ted. 🙂

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      • tedgiffin says:

        Yes, it can be so difficult. The words you choose gave the maximum expression within the minimal framework. I know it , at times, looks effortless when it is not. My problem with lyrics, is either having nothing to say and making it sound forced and dishonest or the words are correct but the melody is not proper. Like how many syllables can I put in a group of 1/8 th notes in the measure= 8. Get it?

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  17. Oh quite unexpected Diana! Great job!

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  18. How do I make a thumbs up sign?

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  19. Great tidbit. Beautifully written!

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  20. Steven Baird says:

    Wow! That had the impact of, well, a blade to the neck.

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  21. C.E.Robinson says:

    Diane, nicely done! Powerful descriptive words! Perfect, complete thought! 💛 Elizabeth

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  22. That’s very cleverly done!

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  23. jademwong says:

    Wow! The descriptions, the adjectives, those words literally grab the reader and pull the reader in.

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  24. Bernadette says:

    Ah, the revelation that the demon always dwells within each one of us. Very nicely done.

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  25. Ocean Bream says:

    Oooh I love this Diane!

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  26. babbitman says:

    Love it. Definitely Pratchett-esque morality on show there! I was trying to recall what else it reminded me of and then realised that Slayer is Gaston from Beauty & The Beast. But you still pack more imagery in than a Disney cartoon – and in just 55 words too!
    🙂

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  27. balroop2013 says:

    This is akin to poetry Diana…love the alliteration in this short piece. 🙂

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  28. You pack so much into so few words. Well done, Diana. 💕

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  29. Frank says:

    Nice. Poetic. Dramatic… Makes 100-word drabbles look long-winded!

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  30. Grat job. Now I want more 🙂

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  31. ghostmmnc says:

    I’d like to read more about Slayer! 🙂

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  32. Wow! Impressive 55 word story, Diana. ⚔ 👍

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  33. Nurse Kelly says:

    Assaults the senses, Diana. I love “Trolls cower, break before him.” Hope you have a great Tuesday. 🙂

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  34. Al Lane says:

    Great twist! Really punchy writing to get all that in 50-ish words 🙂

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  35. That was good. Very dynamic. 🙂

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