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This one was hard! Yep, hard.
I continue to stick with my writing challenge – an attempt to complete the weekly writing lessons offered by Hubert O’Hearn’s Writer’s Pro Shop. This one is on writing dialog and here’s the link for more detail on the exercise: Writer’s Pro Shop, Exercise Three.
The gist of Lesson 3:
Write a 4-character scene using only dialogue. You may not identify the characters. Only the actual conversation can be written down. Each of your four characters must speak 4 to 6 lines or sides of dialogue. Your goal is that a reader knowing nothing of the scene should be able to determine what is happening as well as identify the individual speakers.
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“Does my lipstick look okay? I’m running late. Oh, honey, I have a meeting after work, so you’ll have to handle soccer pick-up.”
“I made you breakfast. You said you wanted breakfast.”
“Oh, yeah, sorry. No time. I gotta go.”
“Who’s gonna pick me up at soccer?”
“I can’t. Really, buddie. I’ve got a crazy schedule today. Someone else will have to chauffeur today. Oh, and I need my dry-cleaning dropped off. Can you coordinate the cleaners with picking him up?”
“I’ll have to check my busy laundry and vacuuming schedule.”
“Don’t get testy with me. It isn’t my fault you were laid off. And this role-reversal thing was your idea.”
“Can you two argue about the dork’s soccer ride somewhere else? I’m on the phone.”
“Don’t call people dorks. And we’re not arguing, just discussing the fact that someone doesn’t care that I’m busting my butt at the office all day.”
“And someone else doesn’t seem to have time for her family anymore.”
“So who’s picking me up? The coach gets mad when he has to drive me.”
“Hello, everyone. I’m still on the phone.”
“Go talk somewhere else, princess dork. You’re not the boss of everyone.”
“I can’t, Your Dorkness. I’m watching T.V. while I talk.”
“Alright, I’m leaving. I’m late and I’m done with this conversation. We’ll talk tonight.”
“Fine. Go to your meeting. And you, I’ll pick you up at five on the dot since I’m doing everything else around here.”
“Never mind. I’ll just ask the coach, and he’ll just yell at me.”
“O. M. G. I’ll call you later. I’ll pick him up, okay. I can’t wait ’til the summer’s over.”